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Sometimes things are funny, sometimes they are annoying. Right now I feel very dry on laughter.

This had a riddle in every line, and was a challenge on me to read, for I was constantly puzzling it together. But it was short, and I actually enjoyed ...

I liked this, and I can't explain why. I apologize for just...you know...giving you a useless comment and wasting a little smitch of internet space.

I found this "cute" in a sense. I loved the constant brown overtone. Only one question - the astericks or stars or whatever....what is their purpose?

I believe this is more suited in a prayer or chant than as a "poem". You seem to be overcome by emotion, sprouting sort of bland examples of horrible things ...

nuts and bolts trail her every trail um...overuse of the word "trail" and you used the term "mechanical bride" too much. it was poetic to begin with, but then you ...

This isn't really...a poem . It's basically something with line-breaks. How about metaphors? More meaning? Some similies? Rhythm, perhaps? The feelings you had behind this were developed, but now you ...

i thought this was beautiful. i love the images, mainly near the end...the first stanza was a bit forced, like a list, but i enjoyed it, nonetheless. please keep writing ...

I personally thought this was beautiful. I love your newly expanded vocabulary, and the images keep my enrapt. Dark is not always a bad thing, as it can breed the ...

Hah. :lol: i really enjoyed this. And two at a time you dirty girl! :D

I was about to make a very rare long critique and then Brian stole it. :( I read through the entire thing, and I agree with him completely, so now ...

She'll love it...are you from england, because in America it isn't until May... But yes, I can assure you any reasonable mother will enjoy this fully.

Very true. Nothing to say in the point of poetry, because I doubt your going for any laurels here - just, perhaps, a passing grade.

Read all TheyCallMeMimi has to say, and then ditch this. You can do so much better. And please don't repeat "EXTERMINATE" over and over again in any more of your ...

This was beautiful as it is, but I must agree - if only you would write more. The color of ROY G BIV hurt my eyes. just saying hha...